last one was bs. :)
theme is imperfections and overlooking them.
introduction: a guy is "strolling" along a harbor and he is also the narrator. he introduces himself, and introduces his condition: he has no legs and is confined to a wheelchair. his life has been one huge internal battle, in which he brings himself down and sees less of himself because of his imperfection.
rising action: he then ventures into a nearby bakery with a view of the setting sun, and sits himself in a corner. next to him sits an old couple. in walks a gorgeous girl, like nothing he's ever seen, flawless, but he pretends not to notice and knows that he has no chance, no matter what he says or does, once she realizes his glaring imperfection she wouldn't want him for sure. however, she sits down, and after a while, introduces her self. she can't, at this time, see his disabled legs, and assumes he is a normal guy.
climax: the old couple gets up to leave, the lady moving quicker as the man takes his time cleaning up his area. the girl calls out, thinking that the wheelchair belongs to the couple.
falling action: guy all of a sudden becomes very hostile and hoists himself on to the wheelchair and leaves....and that's as far as i have, i don't know the ending yet.
Josh,
ReplyDeleteWow, this is a really powerful idea for a story. I think the story will work really well if you're able to get into the main character's head and explore what he's feeling in the midst of his conversation with this "flawless" girl. Is he fantasizing that this is what life would be like if he were able bodied? Is he fantasizing that this conversation will be enough for her to accept him in the end? Or is he, on some level, resenting her all along, knowing she will reject him? Also, what will he and the girl talk about? Will their conversation be normal/run of the mill or will there be some clue in the conversation as to how she might react once she finds out about his disability? In other words, how much will the conversation reveal about her character? Finally, will you show or deal with her reaction at the end? Some readers might want her to accept him regardless of his condition, but as an author you will have to decide how sentimental or realistic you want the ending to be. Personally, I think it would be too easy if she simply accepted him, but I do think both characters should grow/learn something from the experience.
P.S. : I really love the addition of the old couple. They seem to represent love in its truest form -- "in sickness and health" -- and thus, represent what the young man is looking for. Good job.
I like what you have so far. I just wonder why he would not be in a wheelchair the whole time if he has no legs?
ReplyDeleteAs for an ending, I think it would be very interesting if you could give the story a crazy turn, something really unexpected. Maybe you could have him wheel himself into an expensive yacht and all of a sudden, the girl regrets whatever she thought and its too late. Just something completely random like that.
Terence
I like this plot a lot. I think you would be able to do a lot with it. :)
ReplyDeletemy bad, he has legs, they are just disabled.
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